Ageral Posted April 4, 2011 Report Share Posted April 4, 2011 This is my first attempt at a narrative battle report. Heck this is my first attempt at any battle report! Let me know what you think. http://wargameaddiction.blogspot.com/2011/04/colette-vs-lady-justice-25ss.html Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LoboStele Posted April 4, 2011 Report Share Posted April 4, 2011 Nice job for your first attempt. The only critiques I would have is that you switch from first person to third person a bit, and you switch from present tense to past tense with your verbs. If you try to stick to just one, it will make the whole thing flow a lot better. But still very nice! I'm jealous though....I've never been able to get the Siren Call/Paralyze/Poison Ring combo off yet in any of my games. Lucky you. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ageral Posted April 4, 2011 Author Report Share Posted April 4, 2011 (edited) Thanks for the critique, reading through it again I do bounce around quite a bit. I really need to fix that in future posts. I think the only reason I was able to pull it off is because it was my opponents first game ever. edit: My tense there was actually pretty bad, I went back and made some changes Edited April 4, 2011 by Ageral Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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